Written Expression

[younes01]

السلام عليكم ورحمة الله وبركاته
في سعينا لتطوير ماهراتنا في تحرير الفقرات في اللغات الاجنبية ( معضلة التلاميذ ) سيتم كل يوم طرح طلب تحرير لفقرة بالتناوب حيث يوم للانجليزية ويوم للفرنسية وهذا سعيا منا لتبادل امثل للافكار و تطوير القدرات التحريرية للتلميذ
تم بحمد لله وضع فقرة بالفرنسية امس اما اليوم فهو الدور على الانجليزية ، فقط من يرى اخطاء في فقرة اخيه فليصححها ويعطيه تقييمه لها وايضا يعطيه نصائح او ملاحظات ان وجدها

Millions of children are engaged in hazardous situations or conditions , such as working in mines , working with chemicals and pesticides in agriculture or working with dangerous machinery

Write a composition stating your opinion and the measures that should be taken to reduce or stop this kind of abuse

[younes01]

i will back latter with my essay

[طيور السلام]

thank you very much my brather
جاري المحاولة

[younes01]

You are welcome brother

[theorthopidique]

good morning evry bady i will try to write a paragraphe but i am busy this day but i will write it if god want we must do no thing thins day just english becouse all the student must do this ex in order to devolope thier leavel in english good like

[younes01]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة theorthopidique

good morning evry bady i will try to write a paragraphe but i am busy this day but i will write it if god want we must do no thing thins day just english becouse all the student must do this ex in order to devolope thier leavel in english good like

good morning every body i will try to write a paragraph but i am busy this day but i will write it if god want , we must do no thing this day just English because all the student must do this ex in order to develop our level in English good luck

[theorthopidique]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة younes01

good morning every body i will try to write a paragraph but i am busy this day but i will write it if god want , we must do no thing this day just English because all the student must do this ex in order to develop our level in English good luck

thanx ans sorrrrrrrrry about the maestackes i write quickly for that i do lot of maestacks i want some one to learn me how we write i cant put a distance in the biging of the paraghraph can u help me please?

[younes01]

just use ( enter ) many time to make a large distance between the words

[younes01]

In many parts of the world , Millions of children are engaged in hazardous situations or conditions , such as working in mines , working with chemicals and pesticides in agriculture or working with dangerous machinery
The exploitation , deprivation , humiliation , illiteracy , violence, and bad conditions ; this is the words that can explain the situation of this kind of children , this features obligate us beg this question : how long the humanity see this images ? and what we should to do ?
We must reduce and stop this abuse , the organizations like UNICEF should be more interactive , communities must be put a strict rules which can stop the responsible of this sorts of exploitation and inhuman abuse .
The authorities must ban the child who have less than sixteen from work in any situation and try to keep the rights of this children in education , living in appropriate conditions , health and eat , welfare and comfort , to re sum living like all other children
finally , this kind of abuse must be stopped because any human in this life have the right to live in the best situations for looking to best future of them .

[younes01]

i wish that you correct my faults and don't forget the evaluation ( x /5 pts )
i'm waiting for yours essay

[وفـــــاء]

thank you brother
allah pless you

[younes01]

Silent__fire
try to write a parapgraph

[achour idoughi]

The exploitation , deprivation , humiliation , illiteracy , violence, and bad conditions ; these are the words that can explain the situation of this kind of children , these features obligate us beg this question : how long does the humanity see these images ? and what we should to do ?
We must reduce and stop this abuse , the organizations like UNICEF should be more interactive , communities must be* put a strict rules which can stop the responsible of these sorts of exploitation and inhuman abuse .
The authorities must ban the child who have less than sixteen from work in any situation and try to keep the rights of these children in education , living in appropriate conditions , health and eat , welfare and comfort , to re sum living like all other children
finally , this kind of abuse must be stopped because any human in this life has the right to live in the* best situations for looking to best future of them

good written but try to avoid the mistake

[الهام الحياة]

good
i'm busy right now
tomorrow inchalah i 'll try

[الفلاح المحترف]

l will try