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قديم 2011-12-28, 18:55   رقم المشاركة : 1
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15 Panic Zone

Title:
Panic Zone
By:
Karim Cherifi
To:
Every One
Eh Yeah running outside hands on the gun
It is an horror scarry life it's not a words for fun
Those who are a fan of satan his dun is done
no where to run Mercy is gone
Somes are looking for the good or a food
Some others looking for bloods on the road
youngsters with a bad mood
drugs in a hood a law of the wood
If they could they would
people just like animals still fighting
but who is the animal invent law living
evrey body should run toward the islam
that's the aim if you want to win the game
don't exclaim it's the panic zone
Wild Dogs on the hood Vampires sucking the blood
Algeria's sons looking for the drugs
Algerian yougsters like a gangsters hustlers
Lakamora algeriano with grand canons
bands from mlilano doing like demons
Jagoire cars like pablo in chikago
Sigar and costume like Fidel castro
If they continue what they do
Death King stay looking for you
circle of fire َ
Just like Chi Gui Vara and Tony Montana
Here is a drama not the Hanaa Montanaa
No rock band no Demons followers
No sign of skull and two bones
It's a Gangsta Rap
Underground Rap
Pranksta Rap
feeling the Gap
what's up what's up
It's me a man of Rap
like me or not
that's your choice
see me comming through
watcha gonna do
it's my words
comming replying to
doing what it pose to do
on december twenty four
knock on my door
if you want somemore










 


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قديم 2011-12-28, 20:09   رقم المشاركة : 2
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Mh47 keeeeeeeeeeep in touch

i liiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiike these expressions thank uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu for this precious participation.
i really feel great when i see ur writings even if i do not write a single comment but it is truelly nice words. be always in touch. thanks again
.









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قديم 2011-12-28, 23:03   رقم المشاركة : 3
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StrooooNg Strong Strong Words

I like it i read Crefully and i liked ur Courage and
Here u show us How Much u love ur self Like That as it is
I can feel ur honesty
ConGratulation Friend this what i want u to Be
Be so Confident ^^

/
Strong
But dnt forget to Smile
Harmful But Nice
^^


By the Way
Hannah montana_______ like this
i know u dnt like her
p:
But .....anyway
*
*

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on december twenty four
knock on my door
if you want somemore
Is There More
O.o' !!!

.....
hhhh i'm Just Kidding
^^

Nice Job
continue like that

/

/
Ur Frnd









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قديم 2011-12-29, 17:43   رقم المشاركة : 4
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BRAVO BRAVO brother you are on the way of becomin the next great raper,
PS:i see some small mistakes in your poem if you corrige'em you'll have a great piece of work
peace out










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قديم 2011-12-29, 19:15   رقم المشاركة : 5
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المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة maymay مشاهدة المشاركة
BRAVO BRAVO brother you are on the way of becomin the next great raper,
PS:i see some small mistakes in your poem if you corrige'em you'll have a great piece of work
peace out
yeah I can see taht.....The fact that I wrote it in a hurry if I tell you you don't believe that
..........Just for a half hour no more......I'm going to correct somes okey and thatks a lot for your attention









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قديم 2011-12-30, 11:21   رقم المشاركة : 6
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المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Karim_Rap_4_life مشاهدة المشاركة
yeah I can see taht.....The fact that I wrote it in a hurry if I tell you you don't believe that
..........Just for a half hour no more......I'm going to correct somes okey and thatks a lot for your attention
WOOW,are u kiddin me?that great poem was written in 30 mn?that really makes me believe more and more in your potentiels
I ll be followin up your updates
good luck









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قديم 2011-12-30, 16:03   رقم المشاركة : 7
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Yép this what i call It
Inspiration

^_^

Guud Luk frnd










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قديم 2011-12-30, 16:19   رقم المشاركة : 8
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المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة newflower مشاهدة المشاركة
i liiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiike these expressions thank uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu for this precious participation.
i really feel great when i see ur writings even if i do not write a single comment but it is truelly nice words. be always in touch. thanks again
.
Yeah Flower Thank you for your passing ...I had had many precious participations before this one but you were absent I'm always be here but you are not....I'm trying to keep in touch









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قديم 2011-12-30, 16:20   رقم المشاركة : 9
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افتراضي

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المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة shin hyun مشاهدة المشاركة
StrooooNg Strong Strong Words

I like it i read Crefully and i liked ur Courage and
Here u show us How Much u love ur self Like That as it is
I can feel ur honesty
ConGratulation Friend this what i want u to Be
Be so Confident ^^

/
Strong
But dnt forget to Smile
Harmful But Nice
^^


By the Way
Hannah montana_______ like this
i know u dnt like her
p:
But .....anyway
*
*


Is There More
O.o' !!!

.....
hhhh i'm Just Kidding
^^

Nice Job
continue like that

/

/
Ur Frnd
hold on hold on I'm just describing Algerias hoods nothing more it's not a matter of mine I'm disciplined the society we grew in make us so strong why? because of the Troubles in the hood.
but even though I'm trying to win my self and get away from that troubles just like too many algerians simple men around the hood but so cool and calm with principles nothing more....I mean we can't follow brothers in the hood robing and wasting time but trying to be self controled even if we know there will be no good futur for us but there is a GOD so what will happento us will be welcomed with no retreat.
I'm not as you consider no I'm just so simpl but I've my principals and my goals and I think every body right here has a characteristics for me I don't care what are the kinds of your principals at least you've a principals you get what I'm saying
I think the strong who can do what he hate to do I mean Smile even if you can't even if you're sad and this one I can't do.
Yeah Honey I see that loool thank you for correction
for the fact that I hate that disneys or I don't know how they call it I didn't focus on the spelling because I'm not interested in it no more If I was interested I would not mispell it.
there is so many more but I can't write them down because I guess that no one would give an attention just like I told you before you remember I can write every day I am not saying I want to write every day I am saying I can I can do that but I don't want simply only a few members righthere deserve my participation because when you write a great damn poem full of rymes and you see 500 visiters and 5 comments I just loose my temper









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قديم 2011-12-30, 16:21   رقم المشاركة : 10
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المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة maymay مشاهدة المشاركة
BRAVO BRAVO brother you are on the way of becomin the next great raper,
PS:i see some small mistakes in your poem if you corrige'em you'll have a great piece of work
peace out
Thank you so much Miss
this is the first time some one
tell me that there are some mistakes
in my poems I really need that I need
some ones to inform about my mistakes
because this is what i'm looking for
Really thank you.
I just found this mistakes
scarry (adj)______Scary (feared_Horrific)
good (adj)_______goods (Noun mean Foods)
canons (law)______cannons (heavy gun)
stay________stays
please tell me about the other
mistakes please show me
them I'm waiting you please
I need that for real
By the way I don't wish to be a rapper
yes I die For Hip Hop and Rap and some
other kinds of Rap Music depending on the
lyrics I mean the old rap the pure one
not of these days you know what I am saying
....my poems prove that I'm loyal to Rap music
when you see the way I write them....to the fans
of Hip hop and Rap please becarefull to the lyrics
please try to be intelectuels know the lyrics before
you listen to it because there is some blasphemy
words and that's a different society and a different
religion.....not only rap music but others genres too
I'm going to write an article about it so please enjoy me
when I publish it and tell me your views inorder to discuss some more okey
Peace Up









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قديم 2011-12-31, 14:59   رقم المشاركة : 11
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اقتباس:
المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Karim_Rap_4_life مشاهدة المشاركة
Title:
Panic Zone
By:
Karim Cherifi
To:
Every One
Eh Yeah running outside hands on the gun
It is a horror scarry life it's not a words for fun

ether say "it's not a word" or say"it's no words" you cant use "a" with a plural word

Those who are a fan of satan his dun is done

those who are FANS"those" is plural and "a fan"is singular,you should say "those who are FANS"

no where to run Mercy is gone
Somes are looking for the good or a food

"food is an uncountable word you cant use "a" before it


Some others looking for bloods on the road
youngsters with a bad mood
drugs in a hood a law of the wood
If they could they would
people just like animals still fighting
but who is the animal invent law

I dont get this line?

living
evrey body should run toward the islam
that's the aim if you want to win the game
don't exclaim it's the panic zone
Wild Dogs on the hood Vampires sucking the blood
Algeria's sons looking for the drugs
Algerian yougsters like a gangsters hustlers
Lakamora algeriano with grand canons
bands from mlilano doing like demons
Jagoire

jaguar

cars like pablo in chikago

chicago

Sigar and costume like Fidel castro
If they continue what they do
Death King stays looking for you
circle of fire َ
Just like Chi Gui Vara and Tony Montana
Here is a drama not the Hanaa Montanaa
No rock band no Demons followers
No sign of skull and two bones
It's a Gangsta Rap
Underground Rap
Pranksta Rap
feeling the Gap
what's up what's up
It's me a man of Rap
like me or not
that's your choice
see me comming through
watcha gonna do
it's my words
comming replying to
doing what it pose to do
on December twenty four
knock on my door
if you want somemore


I hope I was able to help a little









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قديم 2012-01-01, 11:30   رقم المشاركة : 12
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Hourse To May May

oh thank you so much
yes you're so right yes
thanks a lot
but " an horror" is right
and "a horror " is right too
I think it is heavy to say a horror
but easy to say an horror
Maybe I'm wrong I don't know

"Those who are"___yeah it is a plural word
because of that I put "are" but I just let the
word Fan without "s" of plural to sound good
with the rhymes.

"Somes" is true and "Some" is true too

"a food" yes a mistake yes I did not know that
thanks a lot

"Blood" the meaning will be better than saying "bloods"
I mean "blood" sound stronger than "bloods" maybe
I'm wrong yes.

sorry
I mean "but who is the animal incent Low Living"
the person or the authority who make the people
suffering from the plans he does simply
the diference between the Riches and the poor "
why poor are too many.

Milano
Jaguar__Yes I was looking for the right spelling
Chikago___In Hip Hop culture "C" is mentioned "K"
I just wanted to write it like that.

Of course your corrections helped a lot the most faults was
not focusing on them the mistake that I didn't know
about is that "a" can't be used before "Uncountable nouns"
and "Plural" yeah thank you a lot for your precious participation
it is a pleasure to me it's a honor to me when you
follow my writings thank you for that for real.




I want to inform you that I will not correct the mistakes that I made I mean I will not regulate my topic again just because of members right here can see that I make mistakes too and can see that there is persons who are better than me just like you here okey and thankl you very much Miss for correcting my mistakes and just keep guiding me









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قديم 2012-01-06, 10:31   رقم المشاركة : 13
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المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Karim_Rap_4_life مشاهدة المشاركة
oh thank you so much
yes you're so right yes
thanks a lot
but " an horror" is right
and "a horror " is right too
I think it is heavy to say a horror
but easy to say an horror
Maybe I'm wrong I don't know

"Those who are"___yeah it is a plural word
because of that I put "are" but I just let the
word Fan without "s" of plural to sound good
with the rhymes.

"Somes" is true and "Some" is true too

"a food" yes a mistake yes I did not know that
thanks a lot

"Blood" the meaning will be better than saying "bloods"
I mean "blood" sound stronger than "bloods" maybe
I'm wrong yes.

sorry
I mean "but who is the animal incent Low Living"
the person or the authority who make the people
suffering from the plans he does simply
the diference between the Riches and the poor "
why poor are too many.

Milano
Jaguar__Yes I was looking for the right spelling
Chikago___In Hip Hop culture "C" is mentioned "K"
I just wanted to write it like that.

Of course your corrections helped a lot the most faults was
not focusing on them the mistake that I didn't know
about is that "a" can't be used before "Uncountable nouns"
and "Plural" yeah thank you a lot for your precious participation
it is a pleasure to me it's a honor to me when you
follow my writings thank you for that for real.




I want to inform you that I will not correct the mistakes that I made I mean I will not regulate my topic again just because of members right here can see that I make mistakes too and can see that there is persons who are better than me just like you here okey and thankl you very much Miss for correcting my mistakes and just keep guiding me

I'm sorry for taking so long to answer but you know,back to college and no free time at all..
I wanna say that it would be my pleasure to follow your writings and do what i can to correct you, i just hope you dont get pissed when people tell you that you're wrong cause I ll be doing that ..










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قديم 2012-01-07, 11:09   رقم المشاركة : 14
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what?aren't you going to answer me?I'm waiting










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قديم 2012-01-07, 16:58   رقم المشاركة : 15
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Hourse

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المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة maymay مشاهدة المشاركة

I'm sorry for taking so long to answer but you know,back to college and no free time at all..
I wanna say that it would be my pleasure to follow your writings and do what i can to correct you, i just hope you dont get pissed when people tell you that you're wrong cause I ll be doing that ..



yeah yeah thank you it will be my pleasure and I say nothing I just love to see others criticize me that's so good and sweat to me even if i was demand them people right here to criticize me with a ahrd comments but no one would do that untill you came and you're appreciated that show me that people give a care to what you do or what you talk and if the opposite is true i mean no one say what he think i think there is no intelkectuals right here except few ones and thnk you









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