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![]() my heart is full of pain
i can't even explain even i show you my pain i really can't explain my heart is full ofDisappointment i want to make an achievement how can i pass this my heart is full of pain how can i explain be strong,be active to be impressive,to be attractive my heart is broken damage,lonly and boring unbelieveble feeling stress,scaired and also feer my heart is full of pain i can't explain my heart is crying crying unusall tears my heart is screaming screaming very weared voice i am in a sercle with whit walls ican't find the doors,the windows or even a key i am dying my heart is dying i can't find the light in order to fight no one has the light to help me win my fight my heart is full of pain i can't even explain
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![]() well done sis |
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رقم المشاركة : 3 | |||
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![]() really nice |
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رقم المشاركة : 4 | |||
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![]() wow
good job ^_^ |
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رقم المشاركة : 5 | |||
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![]() Nice words |
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رقم المشاركة : 6 | |||
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![]() ?why so sorrow sis
any way nice words keep it up |
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رقم المشاركة : 7 | |||
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![]() good work sis |
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رقم المشاركة : 8 | |||
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![]() First ; let me congratulate you for the nice piece even it was a little bit melancholic and dark , but my focus here will be on the languag*e , i think that your text needs some adjustments , but i can say it is a very good poem for someone who is not a native speaker, For the languag*e of the poem , i noticed some minor spelling mistakes (i corrected them in red) *** damage (n) (damaged) (adj) ,lonly (lonely) (adj) and boring (bored) (adj) unbelieveble(unbelievable) feeling stress (n) ,scaired (scared) (adj) and also feer (fear) (n) my heart is full of pain i can't explain my heart is crying crying unusall (unusual) tears my heart is screaming screaming very weared (weird) voice i am in a sercle (circle) with whit (white)walls *** i have also a remark about parallel structure. For example in the the following sentence : stress (n) ,scaired (scared) (adj) and also feer (fear) (n) if you begin the sentence with a (noun) the following words must be of the same category (word class) if we translate this verse into arabic we will got the following translation قلق , خائف (ة) , خوف , The correct form must be n + n + n Example :stress , anxiety and also fear Same thing for the following verse damage (n) (damaged) (adj) ,lonly (lonely) (adj) and boring (bored) (adj) ضرر , وحيد , ممل The correct form must be adj + adj + adj مضرور , وحداني , مليت (هذي ترجمى بالدارجة ههههه) |
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رقم المشاركة : 9 | |||
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![]() well done continue plz |
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