My long long long way .... I'm strong

Asolvip · 2013-07-05, 14:22

One day my sun will rise
And I'll be in my paradise
Smiling ,no tears , I can not be paralyzed
I'll reach my dreams ... I'll win my prize
I'll follow my light even it's hidden behind the rocks*
I'll be angry as a rebel ox
I'll use my own tricks and I will be *crafty as a fox
I'll break those Walls*
And go after those fake dolls
To stop their snobbish strolls
I won't listen to my heart's calls
But my brain will guide me*
And I'll choose the situations that work for me
I won't care about any one but me
Because this world is just a test*
So I have always to choose my best
I won't hit another time my chest
I'll correct my mistakes and leave for Allah the rest .

sofmega · 2013-07-05, 16:07

I don't know what to say you amazed me nice return and continue like this sis

Asolvip · 2013-07-05, 17:48

Thank you so much ... I'm trying to do my best those days.. Since I'm on holidays ... So I'll create sth new ...

Katy Pretty girl · 2013-07-05, 18:06

i am realy sure that day will come
and i'll tell u i said so
great job sis

Asolvip · 2013-07-05, 18:14

Nchallah .... I'm trying to build my life on correct basics ... The first one is my religion then my dreams and my studies

Karim-Rap-4-Life · 2013-07-05, 19:11

So better haha w.o.w so nice I prefer this one coz it's more

enthusiastic 18 lines done the job what about if it was about 25 lines it would so much better come on we need more than that we're hangry to read yours okaaaay

Asolvip · 2013-07-05, 19:44

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So better haha w.o.w so nice I prefer this one coz it's more

enthusiastic 18 lines done the job what about if it was about 25 lines it would so much better come on we need more than that we're hangry to read yours okaaaay

I'll try to do better and better next time .... I promise I got a lot in my pocket ... But some of my coming poems will be sad ... Bcuz these days I don't feel very well ! But I'll surprise u

don't worry hhhhh

Katy Pretty girl · 2013-07-05, 20:02

do u'r best
u'll succeed inchallah

Karim-Rap-4-Life · 2013-07-05, 20:03

Oooh I hate Sad poems i'm tired of them look when you keep writing that you're sad is like when you keep saying i am sad and whenever you say it believe me you will be always sad try to be always positive in your writing get rid of sadness things okay ...anyway if you post we will read of course keep it up

Karim-Rap-4-Life · 2013-07-05, 20:04

Yes yes as Katy told you you will be the winner and we'll celibrate hahahaha that will be cool hohoho

Katy Pretty girl · 2013-07-05, 20:15

yeah u will
actualy i was surprised three people i don't them voted for me
cool
thank u

Asolvip · 2013-07-05, 20:15

Nchallah , I wish I could win ... Just vote for me Hhhhh and I'll write for u the best poem ever
Well about writing sad poems ... I follow a structure in writing my poems ... If it was sad ... I start it with sad deep feelings then I finish it by couragement ... But other poems I start with the problem at the end I put the solutions or calls ... But happy ones I start them with happy words , ... I'm writing two sad poems now one bout love which I don't believe in I just wrote it ...and one about that black world ... I'll try to make those two poems very shiny

Karim-Rap-4-Life · 2013-07-05, 20:17

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yeah u will
actualy i was surprised three people i don't them voted for me
cool
thank u

Maalich katy rana fel hawa sawa

Karim-Rap-4-Life · 2013-07-05, 20:20

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Nchallah , I wish I could win ... Just vote for me Hhhhh and I'll write for u the best poem ever

Well about writing sad poems ... I follow a structure in writing my poems ... If it was sad ... I start it with sad deep feelings then I finish it by couragement ... But other poems I start with the problem at the end I put the solutions or calls ... But happy ones I start them with happy words , ... I'm writing two sad poems now one bout love which I don't believe in I just wrote it ...and one about that black world ... I'll try to make those two poems very shiny

Let's say good luck then ....

Asolvip · 2013-07-05, 20:26

Yea !!! Good luck for all of us ...
Katy don't be mad ... You'll get the chance one day ... You're an amazing writer I love ur songs so much
And Karim you're cool too my bro
Peace !!!