مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : i'll say Goodbye
حكاية قلب
2011-11-28, 14:28
Feel so much pain
i've forgot who i am
the girl who respect everything
make her dreams number one
feel so much gelty
i don't understand
am i the one you loved
or you hate..
can't believe you anymore
like i've been killed by your hands
stop standing there
and tell me why
why you leaved me and didn't come back
you told me that everything will be okay
but nothing seems so well
you've let my tears on my checks
like you never felt the same
i've been hurted more than one time
i'll never let my self
hurts again
you want to go now but please
don't come back
and if you will
i'll say Goodbye
.
.
.
By Me
حكاية قلب
2011-11-28, 14:29
hey friends
i want you to judge
on my last words i wrote
^^
ali gourgache
2011-11-28, 14:40
i really like it..........keep doing well..............Good Luck
حكاية قلب
2011-11-28, 14:47
i really like it..........keep doing well..............Good Luck
Thank You So Much
^^
Karim_Rap_4_life
2011-11-30, 17:07
Yeah Girl Your words as usal are well chosen...
for me I'm impressed....is that the truth you
feel pain? don't worry that is the sign that
you are sensible that the kind of real girls
do!!! if someone left don't say nothing...they used to say
"if you love something let it go...if it comes
back it's yours" that's the appropriate reply
to your writing....for the structure of your poem
I think you respected the coherence of your
ideas but there is a little problem...don't worry it's very
simple....there are some grammatical mistakes
for example "You'll go this time" you can say
"you want to go or trip or leave me" like this
because "will" is of the futur "this time" is of the present.
a little revise can do the job okey
I liked the last lines ...really...before i saw you demanding our
views about the last words ....they are so good and
of meaning and strongness...it's something like
"my heart is closed" haha that sounds good
keep doing like that.
حكاية قلب
2011-11-30, 21:53
Thanks a lot for your comment
and your opinion
so happy cause you liked it
é_é
^___^
and for the mistake
yeahh i solved the problém
Don't worry
^^'
thank you a lot
cause this really encouraging me
for Carrying on
thank you
so much
^^
p:
sourire hili
2011-12-01, 18:33
to me it's ttooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooppppppppppppppppp thank you so much sister
حكاية قلب
2011-12-01, 20:22
to me it's ttooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooppppppppppppppppp thank you so much sister
You're welcome
Thank You For your comment
too
^.^'
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