what do u think about it ?

[أميرة مملكة السعادة]

peace be upon you
hru friends?
this time i'll poet my 2 nd poem
Something is not mine
I’ve got something is not mine
Of course it’s yours
You took it without a force
The first time when we met
I was ready to give all what I get
Stop acting as you don’t know
Your heart is guiding you all what you have to do is to follow
You tried to make me feel like your are not untrested
Oh! Sorry your plan is failed
You must to give a chance
At least only once
If you will be my beloved
Both of us in this world will be wonted
And everything will be okay
If just you know what you must say
It’s okay if we start from the zero
In all cases you’ll be my hero
Your real character is so kind
And that what makes me losing my mind
You are here by my side
And acting as a little child
Who don’t know this color is black or whit
Or from where is coming the sun light
From where your heart is coming ?
I prefer it was came from tiland than an undiscovered island


so what do u think about it ????
good bye for the next time with another poem

[Manal_Elf]

oh verry well .. continue

[&ام ايوب&]

its so Nice ...I like it
thnks a lot

[علي لقواطي]

thanks for the effort

[أحمد بوفاريك]

Honestly I think that you're so talented
keep it up girl

[دلال 30]

hmmm.. waww
really i appreciated it
just keep going on
good luck

[أميرة مملكة السعادة]

thaaaaaaank u soooo much friends

[AmIne Naffar]

Thank you for sharing with us , i love it !!

[black dark knight]

i like it very much
thank you for sharing

[جنة الفردوسْ]

gooood...i like it specially when you said.... It’s okay if we start from the zero ..... those words give me strange feeling..yeah let's start from beginning together,build our dreams and achieve our goals.... but just stand by my side

[walidw]

Oh my god very beautiful & interesting , i like it so much and i want to read some more of your writings

[serraj]

very nice

[La reine Nour]

Wow it is soooo wonderfulll.I like it a loooooot sister

[El Hadi Ziat]

Hi,

You have bright ideas and you know very well how to adjust rhymes to meet the poem requirements; congratulations. However:

you check some of your spelling and grammatical mistakes. Moreover; it will be wonderful if you increase you vocabulary knowledge so that you acquire new words; and the poem will be sweet.

in overall; your piece of work was really good and ambitious; continue your nice work with effective improvements


regards;

[أميرة مملكة السعادة]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة AmIne Naffar

Thank you for sharing with us , i love it !!

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة black dark knight

i like it very much
thank you for sharing

thnx friends